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The characters have abnormal colored hair because this is supposed to be an Anime type story. I hope you enjoy the first chapter. Please be kind in your comments. I know I am not good.
Angelic Rhythm
Chapter One
A girl was alone as she walked to school. Her long black hair flowing with nothing in the way and blocking her left emerald green eye. She never minded being alone, in fact she welcomed the loneliness. All of the happiness she had faded away on one fateful day.
"Happy seventh Birthday Jean!" A father told his daughter as he handed her a gift. The little girl known as Jean had her black hair in a pony tail. It tied in a pink ribbon which matched her pink floral dress. "Thank you Daddy!" Jean said happily as she opened the lavender colored box. She untied the white ribbon and gently opened the box, which revealed a necklace that had a crystal pendent of a sphere with a small angel carved in it. Jean's eyes widened in amazement. "Wow Daddy! It's so beautiful! Thank you Daddy!" Jean exclaimed as she hugged her father. The man looked towards his wife who was standing near by. "You always spoiling the kid, Leon. She's going to end up being a terrible brat." The mother said with venom in her voice. Leon looked at his wife. "Suzanna, I've noticed that you have been acting quite sour lately..." Leon said worriedly. Suzanna smirked. "No I haven't! You're imagining things..." Suzanna said turing around and going into another room. Leon looked at his daughter and whispered to her. "You'll need that necklace someday... I'll tell you what it's for when you're older." Leon said to Jean quietly and kissed her on the cheek. He soon sent his two daughters to bed. He kissed them and bid them good night and closed the door. Jean sat up in her bed. "Hey... Nini-Sissy..." Jean called to her six year older sister Nina with her nickname. Nina sat up from her bed. "What is it Jeannie?" Nina asked in concern. "I think something bad is going to happen..." Jean said quietly. Nina got up and walked to Jean's bed. "... Jean, nothing will happen to any of us, and if it does, I will protect you." Nina said calmly and kindly. Jean looked at her beautiful older sister. Her hair was long and wavy. "Really? Thank you Sissy!!!" Jean said as she hugged her older sister. They soon went to sleep unaware of the monstrosity taking place.
"I will never tell you where it is!"
"You will or you will die right here and now. Your choice!"
"I will protect that necklace with my life. You will never get it!"
"Very well..."
Jean jolted awake as she heard screaming. She stood up and hid behind the door. She waited until she heard something outside and looked around the door. "There's nothing unusual here..." Jean said as she walked towards her mother and father's room. Her eyes widened at the horrible image in front of her. Her father was murdered in his own room.
"DADDY!!!!!!"
Jean shuddered as the memory replayed in her head. Ever since that day she had been alone. Her sister had gone to college and her mother talked trash about her. Even her little sister gets her in trouble for things she didn't even do. Jean held the pendent that her father gave her on her seventh Birthday close to her heart. "Dad..." Jean muttered to herself as she continued walking. A couple of male students walked in front of her and blocked her way. "Aw, the depressed girl wants her daddy...?" One of the students laughed. Jean's eyes widened at the fact that people could be so cruel. "... Shut up..." Jean said as she curled her hands into fists. She was ready to punch them. "What's that? I couldn't hear you. Did you say you wanted to date me? Too bad I don't date losers!" The other one of the boys said. "SHUT UP! YOU GUYS ARE JERKS!" Jean snapped at them. Jean was about to slap both of them, but another girl, a redhead with a side pony tail, appeared at Jean's side. "Jean, don't waste your time. These two are idiots!" She said annoyed out of her wits. Jean looked at her friend Mia White and smiled. "Uh... Sorry Mia! We'll leave her alone! Gotta go bye!" Both of the boys left immediately afterwards. Mia smiled with a huge grin. "That's one good thing about being popular! I can make people stop bullying my friends!" Mia said giggling. Jean looked at her preppy friend and smiled a little wider. "Thank you Mia... I was about ready to hit them both..." Jean said ashamed of herself. "I know... They laughed at you about your father didn't they...?" Mia asked as she looked at Jean. Jean only nodded. "Say, have you seen Kara and Lily today?" Mia asked Jean. Their friends Kara Matthews and Lily White hadn't been seen that day. Jean shook her head. "No I haven't..." Jean said thinking about how her and Lily shared the same crush on a boy at school named James Manson. "Oh... So, how's your luck been with James huh?" Mia asked getting excited. Jean gasped. "What?! I haven't even gotten to really talk to him that much... He is usually around other people and every time I try to get close, someone always distracts me... He probably doesn't even know I exist..." Jean said sadly. Mia frowned. "Oh don't think that! He has probably already noticed you!" Mia said smiling wider that before. Jean looked at her. "You're just saying that..." Jean said sadly. "Let's just hurry to school..." Jean said quickly as she walked ahead. Mia soon followed.
After so long they saw a white haired boy talking to a purple ponytail haired girl. "J-James and Lily?!" Jean thought to herself privately. It looked like the two were talking. "Oh, OK... No no! I'm fine... I'll talk to you later James!" Lily said sadly as she ran towards Jean and Mia. As she ran past Jean saw a tear come down her face. "Why is she crying...?" Jean wondered nervously. Jean and Mia walked towards James as he faced them. "Oh, hey Mia! Hey Jean! What's up?" James said calmly. Jean blushed lightly. "Not much... How about you?" Jean said nervously. "Not much, um Jean... Would you like to hang out sometime...?" James asked nervously. Jean looked surprised. "Do... You mean a date?!" Jean couldn't help but ask out loud. James blushed as she said that. "Y-Yes I guess... Would you?" James asked no where near as calmly. Jean smiled. "Y-Yes I would... I'll see you after school in front of Ms. Angeli's class OK?" Jean asked him. He nodded. "OK! Bye, see you!" Jean said as she and Mia hurried to school.
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« Reply #1 on Oct 10, 2009, 9:40am » | |
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« Reply #2 on Oct 10, 2009, 1:31pm » | |
You like it? Really? Oh thank you! I was going to give up on this for the criticism I got on it about how "It's not possible for him to like her at the same time she likes him!". I might continue this story now. Thank you!
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« Reply #3 on Oct 12, 2009, 9:19am » | |
^^ You're welcome! 
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